托福作文写作范文详解healt.docx

托福作文写作范文详解题目：Insomecountriestheaverageweightofpeopleisincreasingandtheirlevelsofhealthandfitnessaredecreasing.Whatdoyouthinkarethecausesoftheseproblemsandwhatmeasurescouldbetakentosolvethem?1 .话题和题型分类健康类；原因+对策题型2 .题目分析人们体重上升、健康恶化的原因和解决办法3 .思路提示A.原因：不健康的饮食习惯快节奏的生活方式繁重的工作压力学校忽视体育锻炼B.对策：多吃健康食品放慢生活节奏学会劳逸结合鼓励学生进行体育锻炼SampleAnswerSomecountriesareexperiencingasituationwheretheircitizensarebecomingheavierandalsolessfitandhealthy.Thereasonforsuchasituationmaybethatpeopleareeatingmoreunhealthyfoodwithhighcalorieandnotdoingexercise.Therearemanypossiblesolutionstothisproblem.（首段开篇摆明观点:人们吃得不健康并且缺少锻炼是导致了普遍体重上升）Inalmostallcases,thecausesofpeople'sincreasedweightarepoordietand/orlackofexercise.Ifapersoneatsmorecaloriesthantheyuseztheygainweight.Iftheydonotexerciseenough,thisweightgainwillbefatandtoomuchfatcauseshealthproblems.Thesolutions,therefore,aresimpleenough:peopleneedtobeconvincedtoconsumefewercaloriesand/orexercisemore.（文章第二段，分析原因并提出方案）Thisiseasiersaidthandone.Nowadays,avastnumberofpeoplehaveaccesstoanincreasedamountoffood.Manypeoplepreferfoodthatishighincalories,sometimesbecausetheythinkittastesbetterorbecauseitisfasterandmoreconvenient,andsometimesforotherreasons.Onewayofgettingthemtoeatfewercaloriesmightbetoshowthemtastierdishesquicklypreparedusinglowercalories.Thoughfastfoodmaycostless,itdoesharmtopeople'Shealth.Thusitisalsonecessarytoinformpeopleoftheharmcausedbyfoodinhighcalories.（进一步阐述方案：给人们低热量的美食；告诉让他们高热量食物对身体的危害）Anothersolutionistogetpeopletoexercisemorezsothateatingmorecaloriesislessofaproblem.Thiscouldbedonebymakingkeepingfitlesscostlyandeasiertoparticipatein.Financingsportsandexercisefacilitiescouldbecostly,buttherecouldbelong-termsavingsforboththegovernmentandindividualsifpeoplearehealthierasaresult.Ifmoreneighbourhoodshadsportsandexercisefacilities,peoplewouldbeabletousethemmoreoften.（进一步论述，提出另一方案：让人们进行更多的锻炼）Inconclusion,poordietandlackofexercisearetwomaincausesofweightincreaseandthereareseveralpossiblesolutionstothisandtodeclininglevelsofhealthandfitness,includingtoshowpeopletastierdishesquicklypreparedusinglowercalories,toinformthemoftheharmcausedbyfoodinhighcaloriesandtogetthemtoexercisemore.（全文总结，再次重申观点）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文观点清晰并不可以使用长难句,语言表达流畅、简洁明了。ThoUgh,thuszanother,but等连接词，使得上下文联系更紧密。Ifapersoneatsmorecaloriesthantheyuseztheygainweight.Iftheydonotexerciseenough,thisweightgainwillbefatandtoomuchfatcauseshealthproblems.If.If形成排比，强调观点，增强语气。Anothersolutionistogetpeopletoexercisemorezsothateatingmorecaloriesislessofaproblem.Anothersolutionisto用于提出第二个方案。Inconclusion,poordietandlackofexercisearetwomaincausesofweightincreaseandthereareseveralpossiblesolutionstothisandtodeclininglevelsofhealthandfitness,includingtoshowpeopletastierdishesquicklypreparedusinglowercalories,toinformthemoftheharmcausedbyfoodinhighcaloriesandtogetthemtoexercisemore.句型.aremaincausesofandthereareseveralpossiblesolutionsto总结原因以及解决方法；句子末尾用动词不定式to表明目的。逻辑结构本文是并列式结构。作者开篇表明自己的观点，二、三、四段分别提出解决方法。最后一段作者重申自己的观点。